http://www.susanwisebauer.com/blog/the-raving-writer/twitter-weekly-updates-for-2009-06-14/ my progress as I write, revise, send to my editor, re-revise, fact-check, galley-read, and promote a multi-volume history of the world. While living on a farm, educating my kids, and teaching. And doing a few other things too. Thu, 09 Feb 2012 03:35:22 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.1.3 http://www.susanwisebauer.com/blog/the-raving-writer/twitter-weekly-updates-for-2009-06-14/comment-page-1/#comment-87443 Christina Sat, 20 Jun 2009 01:55:02 +0000 http://www.susanwisebauer.com/blog/the-raving-writer/twitter-weekly-updates-for-2009-06-14/#comment-87443 It's not as exciting as it could be...I was riding a spin bike for the first time in a long time. This is a sentence from my post on the blog. Thanks for your insight! You know how you get stuck on a sentence because that's how it comes out and you can't see past it to put it a different way? I bet you don't know anything about that! Anyway, thank you for your time and considering the convoluted thing. It’s not as exciting as it could be…I was riding a spin bike for the first time in a long time. This is a sentence from my post on the blog. Thanks for your insight! You know how you get stuck on a sentence because that’s how it comes out and you can’t see past it to put it a different way? I bet you don’t know anything about that! Anyway, thank you for your time and considering the convoluted thing.

]]> http://www.susanwisebauer.com/blog/the-raving-writer/twitter-weekly-updates-for-2009-06-14/comment-page-1/#comment-87442 Susan Fri, 19 Jun 2009 20:08:21 +0000 http://www.susanwisebauer.com/blog/the-raving-writer/twitter-weekly-updates-for-2009-06-14/#comment-87442 I don't think there's any good way to get out of that sentence alive. I'd rephrase: “But it was a wee bit satisfying to feel that burning in my legs, my heart pounding like that, my arms shining." (With what, BTW?) Or possibly, "That burning in my legs, the pounding of my heart, my arms shining--those things were a wee bit satisfying." Hmm. The biggest problem here is that "shiny arms" don't line up grammatically with the other two. I don’t think there’s any good way to get out of that sentence alive. I’d rephrase: “But it was a wee bit satisfying to feel that burning in my legs, my heart pounding like that, my arms shining.” (With what, BTW?) Or possibly, “That burning in my legs, the pounding of my heart, my arms shining–those things were a wee bit satisfying.” Hmm. The biggest problem here is that “shiny arms” don’t line up grammatically with the other two.

]]> http://www.susanwisebauer.com/blog/the-raving-writer/twitter-weekly-updates-for-2009-06-14/comment-page-1/#comment-87441 Christina Thu, 18 Jun 2009 05:16:53 +0000 http://www.susanwisebauer.com/blog/the-raving-writer/twitter-weekly-updates-for-2009-06-14/#comment-87441 This is really quite random, but I wondered if you might know the answer...I can't decide based on what sounds right, and I can't find an answer online (googling). Here is the question...Do I use was or were in this sentence? "But that burning in my legs, and feeling my heart pound like that, and having shiny arms were a wee bit satisfying." Maybe toss the sentence altogether, I don't know. This might keep me up tonight. By the way, I don't mean to make you feel obligated to respond. I know you are so, so, so busy. So I do not want to put you in a bad spot. If you had time I would love to know, you were the one person I could think of that might know the answer... This is really quite random, but I wondered if you might know the answer…I can’t decide based on what sounds right, and I can’t find an answer online (googling). Here is the question…Do I use was or were in this sentence? “But that burning in my legs, and feeling my heart pound like that, and having shiny arms were a wee bit satisfying.”
Maybe toss the sentence altogether, I don’t know. This might keep me up tonight.
By the way, I don’t mean to make you feel obligated to respond. I know you are so, so, so busy. So I do not want to put you in a bad spot. If you had time I would love to know, you were the one person I could think of that might know the answer…

]]> http://www.susanwisebauer.com/blog/the-raving-writer/twitter-weekly-updates-for-2009-06-14/comment-page-1/#comment-87414 Deanna Martin Mon, 15 Jun 2009 16:19:38 +0000 http://www.susanwisebauer.com/blog/the-raving-writer/twitter-weekly-updates-for-2009-06-14/#comment-87414 Don't throw your to-do list away. I just started taking your advice and writing things down after I did them, then crossed them off. Very fulfilling. Don’t throw your to-do list away. I just started taking your advice and writing things down after I did them, then crossed them off. Very fulfilling.

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